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Your Questions About For Those Tears I Died

May 28, 2013
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Richard Your Questions About For Those Tears I Died

Richard asks…

Do you like my poems, they were birthed from my heart thanks for reading=]??!?

Depression

No sun can melt this blackened ice
Nothing can stop this relentless rain
No hope can fill these deepened cracks
No soul alive can feel my weeping pain

These days of mine aren’t happy days
My mind constantly clouded with fears
I do not ask for riches nor for any praise
Only for love to wipe away my dying tears

My beating heart is like an emptied home
And I am afraid of letting anyone inside
For them to tell me that they really care
Only to find out that they woefully lied

Give Me Life

The yellow and red leaves flowed into the sky
Like porcelain ballerinas onto a light blue stage
The wind touched my dusky skin I did not cry
Yet, your words filled my beating heart with rage
Now these winter days seem bitter freezing cold
No sun for filling my soul with warming glee
Right now this question may seem outright bold
But, when will passionate spring return to me?

I wrote these today at about 2:20 am. I was feeling very down and out. I am very depressed and jsut wanted to write these two poems to cope with those negative feelings. Most of my work is usually me trying to make the poems good and revising and doing all this stuff to it, imagery all that but these are straight from the heart. Hope you liked them.

admin answers:

Life is usually the best inspiration
and you really know how to capture it

ur very gifted : )

Joseph Your Questions About For Those Tears I Died

Joseph asks…

What should I do…I don’t like my family.?

My Mom thinks the world of my brother who is 50 years old and their family. My brother does not see my Mother very often with his family. His kids never go see her or think of her. My mother would complain to me about her son’s not coming to visit her. After visiting with her one day…I e-mailed them and told them they needed to make more of an effort and their kids to see her. You never know what tomorrow will bring. They were offended and told me their kid’s only grandmother died tears back … that would be my brother”s wife’s mother. GEES! My mother is legally blind. For the last (25) years of doing most everything for her because my father passed away at age 65 I could not do as much for her because our financial situation changed and I went to work full time. We provided the home where my Mom lived. Which we had to sell and she moved to an apartment which she loves. I thought maybe they could think of her more often…do more for her. My brother thinks he is better than all of his 5 brothers and sisters. He is a snob. He told me some things that would hurt my Mom and I did not tell her for do not want to hurt her. But, in the long run I do not want to go to any family functions if they are there. They make me sick. It would break her heart if I told her what they said about her and our family. I stepped back and decided if I did less they would step up and they did do a little more. In my brother’s Christmas letter all he talked about was how he did all this stuff for my Mom in a copied letter to all the relatives. We all helped my Mom. Now he is her hero and can do no wrong. He seems like such a hipocrit. I wonder sometimes if I am jealous, hurt or what. My mother sometimes brags to me about my brother and all he does and I just say that is wonderful Mom…I am happy he does for her now…but I think she thinks he is her husband figure now…I can suggest something she needs to do and she says No! My brother said to do it this way. WHATEVER???? Now I can do nothing or say anything that is right or have any opinions with her. It is different and I feel sad. Any suggestions. (The funny thing about this my brother agrees that she sides with him and thinks it is ok)

admin answers:

Ignorance is bliss, and it’s always hell for the peacekeepers. Your mom may be happy not knowing the truth, but I’ve always believed in knowing the truth regardless of how painful it might be. It’s not fair to anyone to live a lie, especially when you have to keep track of who can know what. Do you see where it has gotten you so far? You say yourself that nothing you say or do is right. Question is, how happy are you with that?
I’m a firm believer in not hiding the truth about anything. My rule is, don’t ever do or say anything to anyone that you wouldn’t want known to the world. Your brother should be man enough to face up if he isn’t willing to ‘fess up. My second rule is, when your truth is known, don’t blame someone else for your actions.
As a mother, I would hate to think of being “spared” certain truths. I like things out in the open and dealing with them, not being played a fool just because someone doesn’t want to see my feelings hurt.
In your case, your brother has it made. Ask yourself, does he deserve it? I’m not saying you should start a family feud. There are mature, civilized ways of dealing with hypocrites.
Bottom line, put yourself in your mother’s shoes. If you were her, would you want to know the truth, or live on in ignorant bliss?

Sandy Your Questions About For Those Tears I Died

Sandy asks…

what do you think of my story so far?

ill take all feedback so i can get better at this.im sorta just writing as i go because with my other story’s when i follow a plan i tend to go off track so im just gonna see where this story goes:
Feli ran down the street of her small, poor village,looking for her friend rimbaa. he was always a good hider but feli always found him.sh jumped up onto the ledge of the blacksmiths fence. she tried to step as lightly as she could and succed. Feli rounded a corner, nearly falling down , and saw the corner of rimbaas head.she gave a huge grin.
“ha i see you rimbaa. i‘ll catch up to you in no time” she rounded another corner and saw a dead end. Feli gave a puzzled look. Rimbaa had disappeared. she looked around. trying to find him when all of a sudden somebody grabed her shoulder. she looked around and saw one of the dark princes gaurds. If you looked into felis eyes …right at this moment you would see horror, terifiying horror. she tried stepping back but the hand gripped onto her shoulder even harder than before. she knew what happened to people that was caught by the gaurds. The got burned to death, tied up to a tree as it burned. this was how her mother died. tears sprang into Felis eyes scared of what would happen next.:

admin answers:

Your story grammatically correct (I think):

Feli ran down the street of her small, poor village, looking for her friend, Rimbaa. He was always a good hider, but Feli always found him. She jumped up onto the ledge of the blacksmith’s fence. She tried to step as lightly as she could and succeeded. Feli rounded a corner, nearly falling down, and saw the corner of Rimbaa’s head. She gave a huge grin.
“Ha, I see you, Rimbaa. I’ll catch up to you in no time.” She rounded another corner and saw a dead end. Feli gave a puzzled look. Rimbaa had disappeared. She looked around, trying to find him, when all of a sudden, somebody grabbed her shoulder. She looked around and saw one of the dark prince’s guards. If you looked into Feli’s eyes . . . Right at this moment you would see horror, terrifying horror. She tried stepping back, but the hand gripped onto her shoulder even harder than before. She knew what happened to people that were caught by the guards. They got burned to death, tied up to a tree as it burned. This was how her mother died. Tears sprang into Feli’s eyes, scared of what would happen next . . .

In my opinion, the sentences were awkwardly worded, and you did not do a very good job explaining the setting, and describing things in general. You really have to work on sentence fluency as well. But I am not an experienced writer myself, so do not take my impression on your writing, for concrete fact.

Also, work on your grammar, punctuation, capitalization etc. Writing takes dedication, and if you practice frequently, you will definitely improve.

Best Wishes,
Alex

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Your Questions About For Those Who Think Young

May 27, 2013
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Carol Your Questions About For Those Who Think Young

Carol asks…

Do you think teenagers who are young and don’t look their age…?

Is bad?
My mom keeps injecting the fact that it is.
Teenagers should ‘look’ older but i don’t think so. What’s wrong with a baby face?
(Maybe i should apologise to her for not having size E boobs and a butt size of 46..is that even possible?)

admin answers:

No
As you grow older you will realize how nice it is to have a youthful look.

Life is VERY long and you are only young once . You could live to be 115 yrs old right now.
Live it up, play with barbies, and gossip about boys.
That is what youth is about

Sandy Your Questions About For Those Who Think Young

Sandy asks…

Do you think the woman who pranked the young lady into suicide deserves prison?

I personally do not think so. I think that if all people would get prison for harassment leading to suicide there would be a lot of people in prison.
Yes, It is the myspace case.
The story is that a woman said something along the lines of the world will be better off without you to a minor girl and she commited suicide. As for you person who said I deserve prison for writing this..Your an imbecile.

admin answers:

No.
Although it is abhorrable that she would say something to anyone, ultimately it was the girl who took her own life.
She had a choice.
And I agree that most people who kill themselves do so as they are being bullied by others who put them down and make them feel worthless.
The girl should’ve ignored her. It was just that one woman’s opinion. The girl should’ve told her parents. Also, if she killed herself over one person saying that once, she was probably on the verge of doing something drastic anyway.

What this women did is morally disgusting but their is, unfortunately, no law against putting someone down unless you do it repeatably.
Did the girl say that this woman said that to her in a suicide note or something?

Donna Your Questions About For Those Who Think Young

Donna asks…

This question is for anyone who has young children or someone who is a teacher?

If two three or four year old boys were given certain props such as stuffed animals, a toy stethescope and a toy thermometer and told to pretend that they were veterinarians. What do u think they would do during this pretend play?

admin answers:

They would probably pretend to take its temperature, act like they were listening to its heart, look in its mouth and tears. They may come up with a story as to why it had a “broken leg” and needed bandages, etc.

If you are trying to find a difference between boys and girls at this age you wont find a whole lot yet…well at least when it comes to being a vet. They are just discovering gender roles and what is encouraged by society (parents, friends, family, TV, etc.)

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Your Questions About For Those Drivers Who Were Not Wearing Safety Belts At The Time Of Their Deaths

May 26, 2013
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Thomas Your Questions About For Those Drivers Who Were Not Wearing Safety Belts At The Time Of Their Deaths

Thomas asks…

Had a Car accident, what were the chances of dying?

On a very congested high way, my friend was driving at about 100mph and friends at the passenger seat and 3 including me at the back, Do understand we live in a country where there is no speed limit
or atleast not official, which dosent make it right but it was his car and we do say you drive too fast.

So there was 3 lanes and in the fastest lane a car suddenly hit the break we dont know why but he did to avoid it he tried to go through the car and the one next to it in the process going half way into a small truck which caused it to flip over and skid off and we eventually hit the car that breaked and that car lost control and hit the concrete guard rail and 2 other cars were severely broken

3 people were hospitalized 3 flipped over cars 3 others including ours damaged
but for some reason none of us in the car 5 people were even scratched.

the car was severely damaged from the front and sides but it was still running and the engine and radiator still working.
only the my friends in the front driving and passenger had seat belts
none of us at the back had seat belts on

and the air bags did not deploy which is another reason he some how steered it off the other speeding cars to safety off road

What do you think the odds of us surviving were?

admin answers:

You live in Australia … Correct?

Very few roads in Australia don’t have a speed limit, but if a Police Officer sees you driving excessively fast on these roads ~ you will still be fined …. Unless you can prove that the driver has sufficient experience to drive safely at that speed ~ the car was designed to “handle” at that speed and there were no other vehicles in the immediate vicinity.

Based on (1) what I know about your age ~ probably similar to the driver’s age, (2) the speed the car (in which you were a passenger) was traveling, (3) the fact that nobody in the rear seat was wearing a seatbelt and (4) a collision involving 6 cars actually occurred ~~~~~~~~~~ you’re damn lucky to be alive!!

5 young people in a motor car doing 100mph on a CONGESTED highway is a recipe for disaster and I’m glad that I wasn’t anywhere near you and your irresponsible friends. Your friends may not have caused the accident, but you sure as hell contributed to it’s severity!!

This time ~ you’ve managed to cheat “death”. Next time, you might not be so lucky.

Betty Your Questions About For Those Drivers Who Were Not Wearing Safety Belts At The Time Of Their Deaths

Betty asks…

SUV or small car?

im looking for a car for my teenager.. do you suggest a small SUV or a small car?? for what reasons? know any good ones?

admin answers:

Previous answers are all nuts. Lets start by thinking like a grown-up about what is best for the teen…not what they might want. ALL Teen drivers Eventually run their vehicle to the handling and acceleration limits. At these limits accidents happen. In an SUV or small pickup the odds of Rolling over is very high. Most teens do not wear seat belts when not in sight of parents. This leads to them being ejected and crushed by their own vehicle. SO SUV and small pickup is OUT!!! Small car? Your teen will drive a tiny car very fast and most likely either hit another vehicle or be hit by another vehicle. The odds of a crippling injury or immediate death in an accident goes up exponentially the smaller the car.
What you want to buy is a Larger car that is slow and heavy. Hopefully you can find one that is so uncool that your teens friends wont want to ride with them. The more teens in the car, the more likely there is pressure to do stupid stuff behind the wheel, as well as multiple distractions leading to accidents. My suggestion? Look for a Midsize or larger inexpensive car. Something like a nice mid 90s Ford Crown Victoria sedan. The Crown Victoria is the Safest sedan on the road in America according to the National insurance Institute for Highway safety. Fuel mileage is surprisingly decent for a large vehicle like this. Expect about 20mpg. Insurance and liscencing will be CHEAP for a car like this. Also, since they are only popular with Police officers, Taxis and the Medicare crowd, the Value of these cars is next to nothing. You can buy a low miles one that is near mint for $2500 or less. At that price you wont care about all the door dings and the crunched fender it will get. Dont like Fords? Buick Park Avenue/ Le Sabre. Chevrolet Caprice up through ’96. Need newer GM? Chevrolet Impala? Good Luck!

Lizzie Your Questions About For Those Drivers Who Were Not Wearing Safety Belts At The Time Of Their Deaths

Lizzie asks…

Why Aren’t Cars Safer?

My mom just got rear ended by some jackass who didn’t even stop after he hit her. Shes okay luckily, but it got me thinking. Why the hell aren’t cars safer? Why don’t they have all the same safety features as Nascar drivers do? Wouldn’t it make sense to install roll cages, head restraining units, 5 point seat harnesses, lexan windows, side nets, crush zones, conformed seats, etc? Most of these things are cheap and practical. Even though some are pricier (roll cages, lexan windows), who could possibly place money before safety? Imagine all the lives spared and injuries prevented. Why are we forced to drive death machines with nothing but 3 point belts and crappy air bags? Instead of pretty looking luxury cars, It makes 1000 times more sense to have ugly ones with race car standard safety. Isn’t it disturbing that something as simple as going to the grocery store can mean being fully paralyzed, disfigured, or killed?
rko88 you didn’t have to insult me. How old am I? Looks who talking, if you were more mature you’d realize my point instead of coming off as a douche. Driving more carefully won’t save you from the morons not paying attention. The point of my question was that cars lack safety features that can dramatically improve your chances of surviving a car crash. Many people die hitting the steering wheel during a collision. This could be prevented by a 5 point seat belt. These safety features are a better investment than beautiful looking cars.

admin answers:

So, you WANT to wear a helmet?

NASCAR drivers do.

Edit:
Cars have more “safety features” added all the time.
My truck only has lap belts – none of the newer features.
Driving carefully DOES save you from the morons not paying attention. It’s how I’ve survived riding for more than 20 years. The same tactics work in a cage as they do on a ‘cycle. Watching your back is always important. Cagers just don’t seem to think so, relying on a bumper instead of themselves.
P.S. Glad your mom’s ok.

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May 25, 2013
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Mark Your Questions About For Those Drivers Who Were Not Wearing Safety Belts At The Time Of Their Deaths

Mark asks…

Good essay for the University of Oregon?

So this is the essay that I sent into the University of Oregon… Thoughts? Opinions?:

Last February, the tragic and totally preventable death of one of my closest friends caused me to found a S.A.D.D. chapter at my high school. I looked at the behaviors of many of my kids my age and realized that another accident or death was practically unavoidable. I knew I had to find some meaning in my mourning and the mourning of my school community. S.A.D.D. helped me do that.

Students Against Destructive Decisions is “a peer-to-peer education, prevention, and activism organization dedicated to preventing destructive decisions, particularly underage drinking, other drug use, risky and impaired driving, teen violence, and teen suicide” (www.sadd.org). When I read their web site, I learned about the high rate of injury and death to teens because of risky behavior involved with drugs and alcohol. I decided to bring S.A.D.D.’s message to my school. I had several faculty members offer to sponsor my club and ADVISE S.A.D.D., and I recruited students who shared my views. Early on, some students mocked me, saying that what I was trying to do was impossible. But there were other students at my school, who wanted to spread awareness and were willing to take time out of their schoolwork to help me. After doing research, I decided to focus on the use of alcohol, drugs, and car safety, which are all major issues in teenage life, and especially in high school.

The first few months of the club were not as easy as I had hoped because we started in the middle of the school year and were not able to make a very big impact on our school and students. But as the school year went on, we were able to bring a local sheriff to our school to teach parents and students about driving safety, and soon more and more students started coming to club meetings with new ideas for programming, how to spread awareness, and how to fundraise. As the new school year begins, our S.A.D.D. chapter is ready to face the challenges of our community.

As the president of S.A.D.D. and a senior in high school, I feel like it is my job to be a good role model to the younger classmates in my school and neighborhood and to show them that it is possible to have fun without making destructive decisions. Whether it means taking a few seconds to make sure that everybody in a car is wearing a seat belt or going to a party and having a good time without using illegal substances, we can all take responsibility for keeping our friends safe and healthy. I have learned so much from this experience, and starting S.A.D.D. has been one of my proudest accomplishments.
The topic was something that we are proud of in the past 2 years
what? I didn’t say that they wanted it. They just wanted me to tell them about something that I’m proud of in the past 2 years

admin answers:

It sounds good. Next time don’t just write SADD. Spell it out especially in your first sentence. Students against drunk driving. Don’t use the word kids. Use children or students or teen drivers.

Good luck.

Sandy Your Questions About For Those Drivers Who Were Not Wearing Safety Belts At The Time Of Their Deaths

Sandy asks…

Citation/Ticket help?

I need to know what the fine on a seatbelt violation is in Florida. It doesn’t say on the ticket itself and when I try calling, they won’t tell me because they say the ticket isn’t registered. If someone could provide a link or just tell me, it would make my life easier.

Thanks.

P.S: If it matters, the county is Broward.

admin answers:

June 05, 2009 /24-7PressRelease/ — Florida’s New Primary Seat Belt Law

Article provided by Law Offices of J. Scott Nooney & Associates, please visit us at http://www.scottnooney.com

Florida’s new seat belt law will become effective June 30th, 2009. The law is intended to reduce the number of injuries and deaths due to motor vehicle accidents. According to the National Highway Traffic and Safety Administration, over half the people killed in automobile accidents each year failed to wear their seat belts. By providing police officers with the power to pull over drivers who are not wearing seat belts, the law is expected to help decrease this number and encourage safety for drivers and their passengers. Additionally, the new law makes Florida eligible for a government grant of $35.5 million, which was created to encourage states to enact a primary seat belt law and promote safety.

Florida’s Safety Belt Law

Florida’s current safety belt law (which will be replaced by the new law on June 30th, 2009) has made not wearing a seat belt a nonmoving violation. This type of law is considered a secondary seat belt law because officers may not stop a vehicle solely for a seat belt violation; rather, officers may only ticket those in violation of the law if the motor vehicle was stopped for a moving violation.

This law provides penalties for a violation, including fines. There is a $30 fine for adults in violation of the seat belt law. For a minor (under 18 years of age), that amount doubles to $60 and the violation is issued to the responsible adult in the vehicle. Furthermore, all minors must be wearing seat belts or proper restraint (child safety seat) whether they are in the front or back seat of the vehicle. ~

Charles Your Questions About For Those Drivers Who Were Not Wearing Safety Belts At The Time Of Their Deaths

Charles asks…

Do you believe in fate?

admin answers:

No.

This belief was popular among the Greeks and Romans. According to pagan Greek mythology, the Fates were three goddesses that spun the thread of life, determined its length, and cut it.

Ecclesiastes 3:1, 2 speaks of “a time to die.” But, showing that this is not a predetermined fixed moment for the individual, Ecclesiastes 7:17 counsels: “Do not be wicked overmuch, nor become foolish. Why should you die when it is not your time?” Proverbs 10:27 says: “The years themselves of the wicked ones will be cut short.” And Psalm 55:23 adds: “As for bloodguilty and deceitful men, they will not live out half their days.” What, then, does Ecclesiastes 3:1, 2 mean? It is simply discussing the continuous cycle of life and death in this imperfect system of things. There is a time when people are born and a time when they die—usually at not more than 70 or 80 years of age, but sometimes sooner and sometimes later.—Psalms 90:10; see also Ecclesiastes 9:11.

If each one’s moment and manner of death were already fixed at the time of birth or earlier, there would be no need to avoid dangerous situations or to care for one’s health, and safety precautions would not alter mortality rates. But do you believe that a battlefield during war is as safe as one’s home far away from the war zone? Do you care for your health or take your children to the doctor? Why do smokers die three to four years younger, on an average, than nonsmokers? Why are there fewer fatal accidents when automobile passengers wear seat belts and when drivers obey traffic laws? Obviously, taking precautions is beneficial.

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May 24, 2013
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Robert Your Questions About For Those Drivers Who Were Not Wearing Safety Belts At The Time Of Their Deaths

Robert asks…

car accidents, sit bell usage?

hey whats up guys. want some extra points?

I have a proyect in my spanish class about the usage of the sit bell

how many people die for not using the sit bell ?
what percentage of this drivers who dont use it are latins, white n shit like that
what percentage of them are teenagers or adults
which organizations pormote the usage of the sit bell
do u know any laws about the usage of the sit bell
what are the fines a driver/passanger can get if not using the sit bell

the hardest part is that all the data must be gotten from chicago

admin answers:

Hello! So first of all, the “Sit Bell” is actually called a “Seat Belt”.

1) There have been no confirmed cases of a seat belt actually killing a person in an accident, Infact they do the exact same by preventing people from getting killed in collisions.

2) Since there has been no confirmed cases of an seat belt actually causing a death in a collision, we can not calculate a percentage. So there is no answer to this question.

3) The same again, as there has been no confirmed cases of a seat belt actually causing a death in a collision, we can not calculate a percentage, so again no answer to this question.

4) The organizations that promote the usage of seatbelts the most is probably the IIHS (Insurance Institute for Highway Safety, and usually you will find the Police promoting the usage of them too.

5) Yes, there are laws which make the usage of seatbelts mandatory, but not every road user comply’s with this law.

6) Yes, if you are caught without wearing a seatbelt, you can be pulled over by the Police, and you can get a Citation for not wearing it. It is usally $60 to $120 Fine. It can vary though depending on the department.

There you go, hope you got the answers you were looking for and good luck in your Spanish project.

Sandra Your Questions About For Those Drivers Who Were Not Wearing Safety Belts At The Time Of Their Deaths

Sandra asks…

Is my thesis not evident?

This is a research paper for my 11th grade English class, and I can usually write wonderful papers. I’m in a college writing class and I receive A’s on a majority of my papers. However, research papers are not my strongest point. Can someone help me incorporate a stronger thesis in my paper? Thank You!

DNGRS OF TXT MSGS
In 2006, 158 billion text messages were sent nationwide as stated by CTIA, the wireless association. Seventeen Magazine 1,000 sixteen and seventeen year olds and reported that 46% percent of them admit to text messaging while driving, and 51% admit to talking on their cell phone while driving. PRNewswire.com claims that “Recent teen driving tragedies involving text messaging while driving are evidence that driving distractions are becoming as prevalent as drinking and driving.” According to a national survey of more than 900 teens with driver’s licenses from 26 national high schools, 37% of teens rated text messaging “extremely” or “very” distracting while driving; others most likely are not admitting that it is a distraction.
Teens claim that they “text-to-death”, but do they realize they are literally text messaging to their death? There is no statistic on how many deaths per year there are from text messaging distractions and 63% of teens do not admit that text messaging distracts them. A lot of teens have acquired the skill to text message without looking, which is not as harmful as long as they keep their eyes on the road.
Rob Callender, trends director for Teenage Research Unlimited, stated, “It’s a form of silent communication; they can do it whenever, they can do it fairly secretively.” He added, in a recent study (May 20, 2007) TRU found text messaging the second most popular use for cell phones next to using them to check the time. Teens like to text message because it is secretive, parents cannot hear it, teachers cannot hear it and the messages sent are not shown up on bills.
According to dailycommercial.com, Emilee Cox, a fourteen year old freshman holds the record for 35,463 text messages in one month. If young teens are text messaging that much it can only mean trouble for the future. If teens are not thinking clearly, they are bound to get on the road and text message, which will not be good for everyone else on the road.
While some states are still allowing drivers of all ages use their cell phone while driving, other states have banned it. “California, Connecticut, New York, New Jersey and Washington are the only states that have bans on all drivers using hand-held phones.”, according to an article in Land Line Magazine. It goes on to say “With the exception of New York, each of these also prohibits text messaging. Alaska, Louisiana and Minnesota have their own text messaging bans. In addition the articles mentions, “17 states forbid young drivers to use phones while behind the wheel.”, although not mentioning which specific “17 states” forbid it.
Driving behavior is not always a teen’s fault alone, they learn from their parents. 62% of teens admit that their parents talk on their cell phone while driving, 48% say their parents speed and 31% say their parents do not wear a seat belt (PRNewswire.com). Driving is a habit picked up just like any other habit. Parents are role models for their children and should try and set a better example while driving. Stricter consequences for their children to not use cell phones while driving should also be set. Although most teens have enough common sense to set their own rules and guidelines for driving, their parents should be the ones setting a prime example and enforcing strict rules with consequences following if the rules are broken.
William Van Tassel, PhD, manager of AAA Driver Training states, “Motor vehicle crashes are the number one killer of teens claiming more than 6,000 fifteen to twenty year-olds each year. Inexperience behind the wheel coupled with poor decision making construct additional reasons for teens to stay focused while they are driving. Their attention should not be divided among phones, friends and the road.” (RISMedia).
Text messaging is becoming a popular pastime and a dangerous one at that; many teens are driving around daily text messaging at the wheel and it is not safe. The statistics show that plenty of teens do it and that it is clearly an un-safe distraction. If bills to ban phone usage on the road are passed by more states, research shows the road will be a safer place.

admin answers:

The biggest problem I see is that you don’t actually state your thesis until your conclusion, which I assume is that texting while driving needs to be banned to keep the roads a safer place. You need to state that near the beginning so that the reader is clear about why you are providing all those statistics.

I would move from the introduction to the section about why teens text, and develop that a little more. You state that they text because it is secretive, but surely there are other reasons. Perhaps they feel bolder not speaking to somebody in person; perhaps because they can get away with it in school; perhaps because it allows them to hold multiple conversations at the same time. Your sources should have a little more information on that.

I would then move to your statistics on teen driving and texting. Be careful here though. You currently list statistic after statistic, with no apparent reason for them. A better form would be to make a statement, then back it up with a statistic. For example: Some states are aware of the dangers of texting and driving and have taken legislative action to protect their citizens. “California, Connecticut, New York, New Jersey and Washington [...] have bans on all drivers using hand-held phones,” (Land Line, pg#).

Just a trivial side note, try using inline references, like in the example I just gave you. It might reduce your word count, but your paper will flow much more nicely without all the “according to” and “so and so says”.

Next, move into the driving safety section. Begin by offering a little bit of data about teen drivers, then relate that to behavior learned from their parents. Clearly, if parents are teaching their children to drive, they are influencing the type of drivers the children will become. Good job making that connection.

Your conclusion is effective, but a little dry. It would be fantastic if you could include a true story about a teen driver who caused an accident because he or she was using their cell phone, and offer that as a moral or a natural conclusion to the grander argument about cell phone safety.

Best wishes to you!

Lizzie Your Questions About For Those Drivers Who Were Not Wearing Safety Belts At The Time Of Their Deaths

Lizzie asks…

Who thinks the driving age should be raised?

It’s heart breaking to hear about the young teenagers killed in car accidents. When I was 18 (now 24) there were 3 people killed in car accidents that attended my school. 2 of the accidents were just weeks apart. The accidents could have been prevented. If one would have just waited a minute before he pulled out he would still be here today. The other didn’t wear his seat belt and the last was speeding. I wasn’t a very safe drive at 16 either. How many of you were really “safe” drivers? I never took anything seriously because I honestly thought nothing would ever happen to me. But now that I am “mature” and a mother of two, I take driving very seriously and I don’t care who passes me or if I’m only dong 40 in a 55!! I have my life and my childrens life to think about. When I was 16 my friends and I were just careless and never thought about the lives of others. I think SOME teenagers just want to be cool and aren’t mature enough to drive @ 16. I know some teenages are responsible tho!
Okay, so if you ever or if you do have children and one of them die in a car accident is that what you’re going to say about it? Oh well, he/she got what they deserved?? You obviously haven’t matured either!

admin answers:

I do………………

MARCH 2008

Motor vehicle crashes are the leading cause of death among 15- to 20-year olds.

According to the U.S. Department of Transportation, 3,490 drivers in this age group died in motor vehicle crashes in 2006 and an additional 272,000 were injured.

Drivers age 15- to 20-years old accounted for 12.9 percent of all the drivers involved in fatal crashes and 16 percent of all the drivers involved in police-reported crashes.

Twenty-five percent of teen drivers killed were intoxicated. In 2002 (latest data available) the estimated economic cost of police-reported crashes involving drivers between the ages of 15 and 20 was $40.8 billion, according to the National Highway Traffic Safety Administration (NHTSA, http://www.nhtsa.dot.gov ).

Among licensed drivers, young people between the ages of 15 and 20 have the highest rate of fatal crashes relative to other age groups, including the elderly. In fact, the risk of being involved in a fatal crash for teens is three times greater than for drivers age 65 to 69.

Immaturity and lack of driving experience are the two main factors leading to the high crash rate among teens.

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